So far I have received great advice from fellow writers and suggestions from readers. The first thing I will warn everyone is that this is the unedited version of chapter one. It's done, but once the whole book is done a lot of this will change and be edited. Keep it all in mind.
The other thing is that I agreed with one suggestion- Thanks Nathan, that I have to introduce the character sooner in the chapter-by name or even gender.
While the beginning is a little rough around the edges-you will end with more questions than answers-hopefully. If you do have a lot of questions, it is a sign that my hook is working. The next will be out shortly! After I have a great name I will be finishing the second chapter soon!